Friday, July 3, 2009

CHAZ's BIG SURPRISE - Friday Flash 55

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The object is to write a complete story in 55 words..
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This is my first response to this writing prompt:


Chaz selected his next victim ---tall, brunette, resembling his mother.

In a dark alley, he offered her a thousand bucks. The slut seemed thrilled.

When he locked his apartment door, Chaz pulled out his knife and turned toward her.

He wasn’t thrilled to see the gun, the badge and the chest hair on his date.

(©2009, C.J. Peiffer)

9 comments:

anthonynorth said...

An excellent piece for your first time.

Hootin' Anni said...

Oh oh....Chaz is in deep doo doo.

Mine's posted

G-Man said...

WOW....CJ?

Excellent Cherry Poppin 55...

That was perfect! I hope you had fun doing this, please join us again next week, same time, same channel. Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a GREAT Holiday...G

Tall Karen said...

Great job! I really like it. Surprise ending is perfect! You're a natural at this 55 thing. Be sure and let Mr. G. know, he loves to read every one. Happy 4th!

James Goodman said...

Nicely done. A twist is always a good way to end a 55.

Fandango said...

Welcome to the bunch. We dragons like stories where the bad guy gets caught.
Good 55

Ours is published

Dr.John said...

I just love surprise endings. Best of the day so far.

Eaton Bennett said...

Um, I think Chaz made a rather big mistake...great first 55! :)

My 55

Devotee said...

I don't trust anybody named "Chaz" -- except maybe that guy from the band "Madness."

Good job on your 1st 55!